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1. Comfort
Prosper knew nothing would ever be as comfortable as having Blaire wrapped up in his arms.
2. Kiss
Prosper leaned in again because just one kiss was never enough.
3. Soft
When Blaire kept gushing over how soft Marshmallow's fur was Prosper made a note to buy a new conditioner.
4. Pain
Prosper had always prided himself on being strong and that why he would never admit, even to himself, how seeing Blaire in pain made him turn into a puddle of goo.
5. Potatoes
It was all fun and games until they had to wash the mashed potatoes out of their hair.
6. Rain
Prosper couldn't help but laugh out loud when Blaire fell onto the soak
Literature
The Perfection
The Perfection
What is perfection?
It's another sick word used by society.
A word that labels all the creativity and all of the people who think out of the box.
The word marks them as notational losers who have no right to be part of the society.
But every one has the right to be what he wants.
But that is not accepted by others.
The world has a sick model of understanding.
All those who are label "different" are cast out.
They are treated horribly.
No rights are given for them.
They have no free speech.
They don't deserve to live.
All of this is our society now.
Violence and hate.
Child abuse and cruelty.
If you are not popul
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Nameless
I walk out of the tattoo parlor, clutching my wrist, thinking the money was well-spent. My friends walk quickly down the steps, eager to eat, be full. At the next story down there is a man huddled in the corner, ripped, dirty coat wrapped tight around his crumpled frame, worn out sneakers, stained sweatpants, fraying gloves.
My friends don't really notice him, or pretend not to, but my heart squeezes a bit as I turn the corner, clutching my wrist, believing my money was well-spent. But at the third step I shudder with selfishness, heartlessness, pray to God that I don't turn into judgment and lack of humility.
I swivel around, nearly fal
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G'day,
I'm here as a critic for the legendary:
Hope you enjoy.
Critique:
Six word stories are an awesome creation of language and literature: limiting things always made them better, and when a word is one sixth of the story you don't waste it with unnecessary filler. This six word story, while not the most fantastic I have ever laid eyes upon, is quite splendid. Bravo.
I love the contrast. Beautiful, flaws and painfully don't usually fit together in a paragraph, let alone six words. This makes this piece of prose unique, interesting, vibrant. This is why I continued reading past the first two words. I understand 'beautiful flaws' was the prompt and therefore isn't as 'wow' as it otherwise would have been but I still adore the contrast as well as the link to beauty and pain; often overlooked.
But after those first two words it got a little rocky. 'mark her skin' was a little (okay, a lot) redundant. I already knew it was a 'her' and I assumed it was her skin. I picked this up from the title. So, in my opinion, either these words need to change or the title does. Once you start repeating yourself you start losing the reader. If you did delete 'mark her skin' you could fill the three word gap with something a bit more sharp, fragmented if need be, that will hook reader harder. After all, that's what six word stories are; a hook. If the title is to change, then good, I don't like it much anyway. Too blend into the background.
But despite this I think you have created a very powerful piece of work; delivered like a punch with that last word. Doable congrats for that. I'm impressed and (from what I gather from the comments) so are a whole bunch of other people. Keep writing like this. Please. Just... don't repeat.
Vision: 3.5
Originality: 4
Technique: 2.5
Impact: 3
Overall: 3.5 (in stars)
I'm here as a critic for the legendary:
Hope you enjoy.
Critique:
Six word stories are an awesome creation of language and literature: limiting things always made them better, and when a word is one sixth of the story you don't waste it with unnecessary filler. This six word story, while not the most fantastic I have ever laid eyes upon, is quite splendid. Bravo.
I love the contrast. Beautiful, flaws and painfully don't usually fit together in a paragraph, let alone six words. This makes this piece of prose unique, interesting, vibrant. This is why I continued reading past the first two words. I understand 'beautiful flaws' was the prompt and therefore isn't as 'wow' as it otherwise would have been but I still adore the contrast as well as the link to beauty and pain; often overlooked.
But after those first two words it got a little rocky. 'mark her skin' was a little (okay, a lot) redundant. I already knew it was a 'her' and I assumed it was her skin. I picked this up from the title. So, in my opinion, either these words need to change or the title does. Once you start repeating yourself you start losing the reader. If you did delete 'mark her skin' you could fill the three word gap with something a bit more sharp, fragmented if need be, that will hook reader harder. After all, that's what six word stories are; a hook. If the title is to change, then good, I don't like it much anyway. Too blend into the background.
But despite this I think you have created a very powerful piece of work; delivered like a punch with that last word. Doable congrats for that. I'm impressed and (from what I gather from the comments) so are a whole bunch of other people. Keep writing like this. Please. Just... don't repeat.
Vision: 3.5
Originality: 4
Technique: 2.5
Impact: 3
Overall: 3.5 (in stars)