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Greyness surrounds my haunted heart
As I stare at the remains of myself
A photo
A note
A smile
All these objects—forgotten
Reminders of who I am not
A school
A house
A friend
Left behind to start some other life
Without me in a place that is home
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Lets all pretend my poetry is graceful~

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Did it strike emotion?
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~saevusWinds May 18, 2012  Student General Artist
Thanks :3
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~Acornaih Apr 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
You're right, now that you say so, I see now. :)
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~saevusWinds Apr 23, 2012  Student General Artist
Cool.
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~Acornaih Apr 22, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Kill the bit about a mirror... and it's pretty good :)
I'm curious *why* they're forgotten though.. What happened? Give me some answers in these lines, and it would feel much more thorough; hard to feel emotion when one doesn't know what they're feeling emotional FOR.
:) Hope this helps.
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~saevusWinds Apr 22, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you! It did!

I tried to depict moving away without actually saying the word.
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