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Because of Homestuck...•  I ask people about their signs, so I can shake my head and giggle.
• When I see a frog, I think of ancient ruins.
• Computer games seem more life threatening.
• Trolling has taken on an entirely new meaning for me.
•  I have rethought about the safeness of apple juice.
•  Starry nights are funnier.
•  Ghosts are really cool, whether they be green and saved as a computer background or wandering aimlessly around.
•  Magic 8 balls and cue balls are now very fascinating for me.
•  I secretly despise Betty Crocker and some baking food products.
•  I wonder if people can have different colored b
We bleedEvery human
Bleeds identical
Crimson tears.
College GraffitiStudying equals success
But no freedom.
Sad Blue EyesWhen I was little, my mom used to carry me everywhere. She would cradle my pudgy pale body and rock me back and forth, watching me as I cuddled close to her warm body. My mom's eyes were big and blue, but were always terribly sad when they saw me. On the days when her eyes would become so glossy raindrops fell off her face, my mom would roll up my dress sleeve to reveal a delicate bangle resting around my wrist. "Your number suits you…sweet like berries…" she would coo in my ear, "Palmer and Rodney don't have numbers as sweet as yours." Her voice would weaken and shake whenever I asked what my number was.

I didn't understand why it
CreationWords in
Ink
Creates beautiful
Worlds
Always Thought...Always thought,
But you never came…
Most Hated Day of the WeekWho hates Mondays?
Because I do!
ImperfectBeautiful flaws mark her skin,
Painfully.
not anymoreshe can't stand the silence anymore.
Young LoveRed lipstick
His cheek
How innocent
Thoughts Unsaid"I always thought you..."

"What?"

"Nevermind."
Loving an old oak treeShe twirled about the meadow, wearing a blue dress to match the sky. Running with her, was a boy in new suede shoes, who laughed as he tried to catch her.

"Come on! Wait up," Cole shouted, running through the crowds of daisies and to a huge oak tree.

"I told ya! I'm faster than any of you boys!" Claire laughed, as she was sitting at the base of the tree, with a few flowers in her pudgy hands.

"Yeah, yeah. I let you win." Cole said coolly, rubbing his neck, "You just remember that."

Claire giggled, "Sure. Here, sit next to me." She said, in a chirpy tone, patting the ground beside her.

Cole glanced at her ocean eyes, maple lips, her terra
My CountryWe Fell...

...But We Rose Again
Reward: My HeartWanted:
A man who actually cares
EmigrantSpoke English.

Always thought in Italian.
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Tough News

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At hospital
Crying couple
Tough news
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Just a sad six word story that popped into my head.
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~Ruminzal Feb 25, 2012
Hmmm...This calls for a word by word looking.

At. Meh. Seems like a waste of one of your six words. Define the next word more with this space. Don't leave it just with at. That is inferred by the rest of your writing.

Hospital. Uh oh! Good news or bad news. This sets the scenery, instantly I'm brought there. What's happened, is it good, is it bad? Bad things and good things happen here.

Crying. Well, hospital and crying don't do so well together. I think perhaps this word should be more defined. Like agonizing, or terrified, or dying. Not just crying. I mean if gives to the imagery, but it closes how much we can interpret.

Couple. Married or not? Hmmm, I like this word here. It implies that whatever transpired effects them both. Or at least, I think it does. I suppose one bad thing could have happened, and the other could be there for support. Open for interpretation, but adds imagery, excellence!

Tough. Again, use a better word here. Define the news more; but leave it open. Like you did with couple. It was open, but added to imagery. I think that's the trick with this. Give me the best white and black pictures, and leave it up to me to color it.

News. This is necessary but somewhat boring. It doesn't add to the imagery, but it gives something to the story that must be here.
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~saevusWinds Feb 25, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you! :)
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~Ruminzal Feb 25, 2012
Thanks for writing :)
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~saevusWinds Feb 26, 2012  Student General Artist
No problem!
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^3wyl Oct 26, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Oh dear..

I like how you have phrased things and made it somewhat fragmented, as if to reflect that the couple's own lives have shattered completely because of this.

Quite interesting, I have to say... at least they have each other, I guess. =/
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~saevusWinds Oct 26, 2011  Student General Artist
Yep. Thank you.
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~eiarain Oct 8, 2011
Oh...
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~saevusWinds Oct 8, 2011  Student General Artist
What?
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~eiarain Oct 12, 2011
just a sigh
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~saevusWinds Oct 12, 2011  Student General Artist
oh. well, did you like it?
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